Loglines are tricky things – distilling 120 pages of script into one sentence and imbuing it with the power to summarise, titillate and intrigue is a surprisingly difficult task. As a writer it can be hard to develop a good logline because you are invested equally in each part of your work – identifying the crucial story elements and leaving everything else out feels like you aren’t doing your script justice. But remember, a good logline is crucial to selling your script; in a covering letter, in a pitch, in the 30 second window you have with an executive when you accidentally meet on the Great Wall of China. That being the case it is vital that you develop a good logline for your magnum opus, something with sizzle and pop, but also, crucially, something that tells the audience what the script is about.

The difference between a logline and a tagline

A logline is a one (or occasionally two) sentence description that boils the script down to its essential dramatic narrative in as succinct a manner as possible.

A tagline is a piece of marketing copy designed to go on posters to sell the film

- In space no one can hear you scream (Alien)

Crucially, a logline contains all the elements necessary for the telling of a good story. It is written for industry professionals to show them that you can create a viable story for the script - a marketing hook alone won't cut it.

One further note that you won't like: A logline is the DNA of your script. If you can't make the logline work, it's probably becasue the story in your script doesn't work. This is why some people suggest writing a logline for your idea before embarking on the script.

Not sure where to begin? These tips are going to help:

1. A logline must have the following

-       the protagonist
-       their goal
-       the antagonist/antagonistic force

2. Don’t use a character name

It has no intrinsic information and so is a useless word. Instead, tell us something about the character.

- A sous-chef

- An ex-superhero

3. Use an adjective to give a little depth to that character

This is your chance to show some character. Beware of cliche, and also of the power of irony. It's helpful if the characteristic you describe will have something to do with the plot.

- A mute sous-chef

- An alcoholic ex-superhero

4. Clearly and quickly present the protagonist’s main goal

This is what drives your story and it will drive your logline too. Make sure that the goal is present early in the script - if you don’t make good on your logline’s promise early enough the rest of the script won’t get read.

- A mute sous-chef wants to win the position of Head Chef at her boss' new restaurant

- An alcoholic ex-superhero searches for his daughter

5. Describe the Antagonist

The antagonist should be described in a similar, but preferably shorter, manner than the hero. If the hero faces a more general antagonistic force then make it clear that they are battling something, not just life’s bumps and buffets.

- A mute sous-chef wants must fight off an ambitious rival to win the position of Head Chef at her boss's new restaurant.

- An alcoholic ex-superhero searches for his daughter after she is kidnapped by his dementing, jealous former sidekick.

6. Make sure your protagonist is pro-active

He or she should drive the story and do so vigorously. A good logline will show the action of the story, the narrative momentum that carries you through the script. In some cases the protagonist will be reactive, but note, this is not the same as passive.

7. If you can, include stakes and/or a ticking time-bomb

These are very useful narrative devices that add urgency tou your script. If they fit in easily, include them in your logline.

- To save his reputation a secretly gay frat-boy must sleep with 15 women by the end-of-semester party.

8. Setup

Some scripts operate in a world with different rules to our own and require a brief setup to explain them, e.g. most science-fiction stories. Others have a protagonist whose personal or psychological history is crucial to the story and needs to be explained. Again, be brief.

- In a world where all children are grown in vats...

- Driven to a mental breakdown by an accident at work, an aquarium manager...

9. About the ending

Do not reveal the script’s supercool twist ending, even if it is the next The Usual Suspects. The story, and thus the logline, should be good enough to hold up by itself; a surprise ending should be a lovely bonus found when reading the script. N.B. This all changes when you get to writing your treatment.

10. Don’t tell the story, sell the story

Create a desire to see the script as well as telling them what’s in it. Loglines are like poetry, every word counts. Tinker, test, and tinker some more.


If you can't write a decent logline of your idea before embarking on the script, then maybe reconsider writing that thing. If it's unfocused and muddled at the logline stage, it's not going to get any better as you write.

Good luck, and feel free to submit samples in the comments box.

James Burbidge
James performs a plethora of tasks for Raindance; writing articles, editing the newsletter, managing Twitter, helping on courses, organising volunteers and running the script services are but a few of the ones he is allowed to tell you about.

When he isn’t daydreaming about daylight he watches films (well, duh!) reads a bit, writes a bit and plays Ultimate Frisbee a bit too seriously.

156 thoughts on “10 Tips for Writing Loglines

  1. This helped me so much! Thank you! And if you're curious, this is what I wrote:

    A subdued cleaning lady has to work her way through three dangerous situations as she enters what at first appears to be an empty office building to do her cleaning chores, and encounters a number of egocentric men.

    It's going to be a dutch story, so I've translated it for you 😛

  2. A humble but gifted priest must risk his son’s reputation in order to reunite with his beloved and save his world before a dark priest seizes Wisdom’s power.

  3. I really love what you have to say about Loglines and how to include everything, but nothing extra. I'm a film student and this information is valuable. Thank you.

  4. Thanks for posting this, James — I've been working on adapting my comic book series for tv and this is a great springboard for getting it started.

  5. A lonely teenager lives completely alone in a boarding school, without any friends or teachers. However, he soon discovers he might not be the only one living there…

    Is this all right?

  6. here is logline of my film that is in development stage – "Top Comedian looses his power of comedy; his soul as he faces the fear of death; Cancer… and then the struggle begins within to get his power back!

  7. "A stressed-out cynical young adult seeking love and fulfillment must fight against rival forces on the side of good and evil after learning he is prophesized to change the fate of the human race."

  8. "An ex-assassin turned superheroine is on the run from a vengeful CIA Agent who has discovered her secret identity."

    I hope you will consider doing a marketing blurb how-to as well! I know that's more for books, but I think this kind of advice transcends all mediums.

  9. What about: In a world where all children are grown in vats, a mute sous-chef must fight off an
    ambitious rival to win the position of Head Chef at her boss’s new restaurant while helping an
    alcoholic ex-superhero search for his daughter after she is kidnapped by his demented, jealous former sidekick, who was driven to a mental breakdown by an accident at the aquarium where he now works…

  10. "A confused young screen writer must decide whether to pitch his idea on this page or risk his pitch being stollen by his ever so eager competitors who read these posts." How is that?

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  12. An uneducated poor and cocky nobody, falls in love with the daughter of an oxford educated business tycoon and single handedly defeats him in business to prove his worth and get the girl.

  13. Generalize the group. A gang of misfits, a diverse set of friends, mixed-matched couples…. hope that helps.

  14. Generalize the group. A gang of misfits, a diverse set of friends, mixed-matched couples…. hope that helps.

  15. An affluent housewife wants to catch her husband in the act, so she and her two childhood friends venture on a girl’s weekend at her summer home on the historic Honeywell Lake, but she finds out more about herself, her husband and her friends than she bargains for. ????

  16. An affluent housewife wants to catch her husband in the act, so she and her two childhood friends venture on a girl’s weekend at her summer home on the historic Honeywell Lake, but she finds out more about herself, her husband and her friends than she bargains for. ????

  17. won't she be cooking the babies from the vats? or only the ones bred in rare-vineyard balsamic vinegar?

  18. The comedic giveaway would be contained in the adjective used to describe your protagonist combined with the situation. If you need to spell it out, you can do better.

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  20. A whole village is razed to the ground when a demented and perverse herbalist deceive the people that a certain girl was responsible for the recent deaths in the village and must be sacrificed to the gods to cleanse the land, while the local chief is away to a nearby village to seek diagnosis and treatment for cholera.

  21. On a regular workday at home in NY city, a young screenwriter witnesses a girl's kidnapping below his window and becomes involved, which entangle him with the kidnappers and eventually embroils him into the Russian mafia's underground in the US and with a shipload of stolen uranium seeking a buyer….his actions precipitate a nuclear catastrophe that could end the world as we know it….

  22. 56-year-old ex F1 champion was not sure if where to begin his life from, after losing 30 years in unknown. His search for his loved ones leads him to take on the steering wheel once again, this time outside the stadium. He will not let the fate take it away from him again.

  23. A flying prodigy thrust into the twilight of a war, is rescued from certain death by a beautiful young woman who longs for the remembered love of her father, the brutal German Field Marshall

  24. Should I just stick with the first sentence?
    A man longing to do something that he knows is unquestionably good and right, decides to kill a pair of child molesters. He flees the scene of the crime and journeys across the western US where he meets an Indian with mystical insights an ancient storyteller and a little girl who help him see that having the courage to do what you’re meant to do is what truly matters in life.

  25. if you asked a producer if this was an unquestionably good and right logline, after reading it to him (because who could cold-turkey remember all this) he would punch you dead in the face.

  26. Johny Beaumont So stick with the first sentence then, with perhaps a few tweaks? If I ever meet a producer who is into punching me in the face, I think I would not like that relationship anyway. Ha!

  27. A man haunted by the tragic loss of his wife and son kills a pair of child molesters then flees to the Badlands where an Indian takes him on a spirit journey, reuniting him with the people who have been most significant in his life.

  28. Jen Govey …can I please ask your opinion on this one Jen? "Despite growing up in a third world nation and never seeing a baseball game, a gentle spirited athlete grows up to become his country first major league baseball player."

  29. Past and present collide during a high school reunion, when a happily married woman’s sanity is threatened by her first love; a sexy, charismatic, but destructive man, intent on making her crave him, by reminding her how good they used to be together.

  30. I already have the outline of this story. I am trying to get some feedback on this logline.
    Is it too long?
    Have I included enough information?

    Two long time friends since the age of 7, grew up, graduated high school, then went off to college only to fall in love with the same girl that caused their friendship to go sour and that caused a very bad uproar between the two x-best friends and the girl husband.

  31. SawWind Hollow – Horror

    On Halloween night in the small town of Saw Wind Hollow, a fiesty teenage girl's plan to cut loose and have fun is interrupted when the veil between our world and the spirit world vanishes. Now she must uncover the town's dark past in order to stop an ancient evil from destroying those she loves and even the world.

  32. In Ancient Egypt, a beautiful, charismatic slave catches the attention of two identical, yet very different, royal brothers whilst trying to help her miserable people.

    What do you guys think of this one?

  33. How's this? Oh and could you also tell me if I need more commas or have them in the wrong places?

    In Ancient Egypt, a beautiful, charismatic slave creates and breaks familial bonds during her fight against oppression.

  34. A Computer analyst and his podcaster wife take the family on a fun-filled beach camping trip, until they run afoul of black market, endangered animal poachers bent on collecting and selling newly hatched turtles to restaurants overseas.

  35. An eccentric physicist explains to his drunk roommate how he made a machine that will open a portal to another dimension which allows him to win the heart of his soulmate since he can't in this world, then he travels across dimensions to hold the one he always cared for most.

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